My Special Place
My special place is somewhere really far and somewhere that starts with a W. My special place has a huge shiny waterfall. The waterfall is loud and has huge rocks on it. You can nearly see through the waterfall from a certain point. There are also heaps of kinds of fish like trout, rainbow trout and brown trout and if you're lucky you might find an eel.The place also has Native birds and slimey mossy rocks and insects.
My place has a big glimmering river and a stream connected to it . It also has a huge circle of water with the shiny waterfall next to it. When we were trotting to the car my dad spotted a trout it was trying to climb the rushing water flow on the rocks. the water was so quick it was as quick as a cheetah going its fastest .
When I went in I had a little help from my dad and some rocks so I couldn't get pushed down the rushing water flow. Also there were people jumping off the water fall. Manasseh was jumping off the high as cliff into the water.when me and Ethan and dad and mum were just relaxing in the water. The water was as cold as a 8 degrees celsius pool but i had a swim suit so i could feel warm . But it was still a bit cold. When i was swimming towards the deep part of the river more and more oge and seaweed will appear i wasn't aloud to go to the really deep part of the river because i might drown in it
Great work Wisdom. One thing you did well was adding detail in your writing. One thing you need to work on is punctuation Because you have a lot of Lower case I's - Paige
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